Tuesday, December 14, 2010

CHAPTER SEVENTEEN

ANALYSE 


After walking at a human pace to the end of Savanna’s street, Edward stopped and turned to face me, placing his hands on both of my arms. He stared blankly at me for a moment, before his marble expression broke and surrendered.
          
“Bella,” he sighed, as he pulled me into his embrace.
            
“Your not angry?” I asked quietly, with a hint of hope in my voice.
            
“I should be,” he replied, “its rather annoying the effect you have on me,” he added affectionately.
            
My arms were around his waist, and I squeezed him slightly as a sign of appreciation. I knew that I shouldn’t have taken off like I did, and understood how lucky I really was that Savanna was alone.
            
“Come-on,” he said, “we’ll talk when we get home.”
            
No one was watching us, and Edward couldn’t hear anyone’s mind thinking about us, so we ran home at our speed.
           
I hesitated as we reached the front door to the house. I felt rather embarrassed about the last ten minutes or so, I should have controlled my emotions more – I wondered what the others were thinking.
            
“Its okay Bella,” Edward said reassuringly. I guessed he could tell how I was feeling.
            
I followed him into the house, and despite the fact that I was really not reassured, I felt rather confident. Jaspers gift never failed to surprise me – I was sure that I gave him the most practice.
            
“Hey,” I said quietly when we entered the main living area, “sorry – “. Everyone was together now – most likely discussing the decomposing bodies in the lagoon.
            
Alice came over to me and gave me hug.
            
“I would have done the same if you hadn’t bet me to it,” Rosalie said, with a reassuring smirk on her face – she was sitting next to Emmett on the couch.
            
I smiled slightly at her in appreciation. I knew that she was telling the truth too – Rosalie was more of a second mother, rather than an aunty to Renesmee.
            
“So, we’re thinking that the lagoon has been used as a place for getting rid of bodies since the early 1900’s when the nearby river was reported as being poisoned,” Carlisle said, to Edward and I – but mostly for my benefit.
            
“A vampire’s dream,” Jasper said quietly, yet matter-of-factly.
            
I didn’t understand what he meant by this, and looked at Edward for a further explanation.
            
“You haven’t experience a very normal vampire life, and your newborn phase was basically nonexistent,” Edward said, “but when a vampire kills another human you can’t just leave the body anywhere, like we can with animals; its puts all vampires in danger. You have to find a way of disposing the body.”
            
I felt sick at the thought, but Jaspers comment made sense now.
            
“So how long have the bodies been in the lagoon?” I asked.
            
“My guess would be less than twenty four hours” Carlisle said, “and given the circumstances, its quite possible that they were at the party last night.”
            
This shocked me, when I saw the bodies I’d thought that they would have been at least a few months old.
            
“Did you learn anything from Savanna?” Emmett asked, causing me to move away from my thoughts about the bodies.
            
I felt bad again about my rashness regarding my decision to see her, then I remembered what she had said, “yes!” I replied, a little surprised that I had let this fall to the back of my mind temporarily instead of blurting it out when I first arrived home – I was so overwhelmed that Edward wasn’t mad with me. “She’s a venevore! They are venevores,” I added.
            
I watched as everyone’s expressions became confused, including Edwards; I guessed that they hadn’t heard of this name before either, and Savanna clearly did not have this in her mind when Edward reached me.
            
“A what?” Rosalie asked.
            
“A venevore,” I replied, I was sure that she had been telling the truth. “She had long veins sticking out along her arms, and her fingers had changed into gnarly green claws almost,” I added, hoping that one of them would soon realise what we were dealing with here – perhaps venevore was another name for something?
            
“I’ve heard of nothing like that before,” Carlisle said in a monotonous voice, clearly still trying to process and make sense of what I had said.
            
“Bella, show me,” Edward said.
            
I nodded.
            
Closing my eyes I pushed my mind out towards him, lifting my shield that would usually be protecting my thoughts, and recalled how I had seen Savanna.
            
“Wow,” Edward muttered to himself. I opened my eyes, everyone was staring at him; “venevore!?”
            
“Surely these characteristics are mentioned somewhere?” I asked, “In some form of myth or legend even?”
            
“We will need to do some research,” Carlisle replied, “the Seward Library has many old documents about the history of the area, we can start there.”
            
“And Savanna has promised some answers on Monday,” Edward added.
            
“Carlisle, are the bodies in the lagoon not disintegrating a little faster than they should? Even with the water being acidic?” Alice asked, her voice chimed and I realised that she had kept quiet the entire time.
            
“Of course!” Edward said, sounding a little more enthusiastic – Alice must have been on to something.
            
“Ahh, yes – ” Carlisle answered curiously.
            
“So how was the bear that almost killed Emmett poisioned?” she asked.
            
No one responded, and at first I had no idea where she was going with this – “her claws!” I said, breaking the silence as I made the connection.
            
“Yes,” Edward said, already knowing what Alice did, “the acid is actually their venom!”
            
Vene,” Esme muttered as she was processing what Edward was saying too.
            
“So, the bear was actually being hunted by one of them?” Emmet asked.
            
“The name, venevore, its really quite self explanatory if you look at it that way,” Esme said, “we drink blood, they drink – “
           
Venom!?” I said, interrupting her.
            
“It sounds wrong, but fits,” Edward said.
            
“And it also explains why the bodies in the lagoon are decomposing so quickly,” Alice added.
            
“Yes,” Carlisle said, “they’ll be completely disintegrated by the time the police have the chance to even begin looking for them –“
            
“Making it look like they simply ran away,” Jasper finished. “Truly a vampires dream,” he added again.
            
“Eric’s one too,” I exclaimed, “A venevore. I noticed his fingers were the same gnarly green, and claw-like as Savannas when we took Renesmee home last night.”
            
Carlisle and Edward nodded slightly in acknowledgment, the others remained as still as statues while they processed everything. “I’ll go to the library now,” Carlisle said, “Bella’s right, there has to be some sort of documentation on this – I don’t think they would be the only ones either! They’re different to Nessie; their characteristics seem too, individual; Nessie’s simply both human and vampire.”
            
“I’ll come to,” Edward said.
            
Carlisle and Edward left the room to head to the library, Jasper went along as well.
            
I went upstairs to check on Renesmee, she was just waking up – I sat on the side of her bed and placed my cool hand on her forehead.
            
“Hows your head?” I asked softly.
            
“Mmm, not to bad,” she said, her voice slightly croaky from sleeping.
            
I sat next to her in silence for a few minutes whilst she continued to wake up, then heard a slight clinking sound, and footsteps coming up the stairs. Esme came through the door quietly, holding a tray with food and some sort of herbal tea; Alice and Rosalie were behind her. “We thought we’d come and join you two for a while,” Esme said.
            
I smiled at them as they came into the room. Nessie sat up so that Esme could place the tray in front of her. All four of us sat with Nessie on her bed for the next few hours, talking about all that had happened in the last twenty-four hours, from the party last night to me confronting Savanna, whilst Carlisle, Edward and Jasper were at the library trying to find more information about venevores.
            
Despite the fact that what we weren’t talking about the most ideal issues, I was enjoying the company of the girls never-the-less.
             
             
© Copyright to Jonathan Cameron 2010

15 comments:

  1. another great chapter. can't wait to the next chapter this is so good.

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  2. Good work again! Can not wait until the next chapter. Like you said to me. You will keep the pack and Jacob in back of your mind to the rescue I hope. This clan is more dangerous than the Volturi all together. You know what you are dealing with and who in the Volturi. But, this clan is something all together. A complete mystery. Do not let anything happen to the Cullens. They can not die for the stories to go on forever.

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  3. well heloo again and yes it is the publisher. i shall not give my identity away but i will say you have done a great job. but remember you may NOT give what the readers want. you MUST do what you feel like doing. and remember i am a very good friend of stephenie meyer. she said you have done a FABULOUS job but she does not want you to follow the comments. she wants you to make the story how YOU want it. you have done a very good job and remember dont let me and stephenie meyer down. she is very excited that you have been continuing her novels. remember what i said......or face the punishments- no novel published from you.

    -Anonymous

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  4. Hey. Thanks for your comment. Your advice is so on-to-it (not that you need to be told that haha) :D I'm always that whole lot more driven to write quicker!
    I am definitely going to do what I feel is the best way to go with things (so no need to worry there) - but would still like to encourage people to keep on giving me comments, advice, and criticism - because there can be things that I could overlook that don't actually fit with where Stephanie Meyer left things at Breaking Dawn.

    Big thanks to everyone who is reading the chapters too and especially to those who are commenting here as well - keep it up.

    Best,
    J :D

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  5. i love this..
    please continue to add more chapters.
    thanks...

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  6. another great chapter indeed... i'm excited to read the next chapter... thanks for the story.

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  7. great chapter. Your a great writer! Please update soon!

    Kelley

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  8. Love the Chapter can't wait to find out what is going on in this town. I hope the Cullen's will be okay. Keep posting I am so glad you have found a way to keep the story going I was lost when I finished reading Breaking Dawn.

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  9. this was a great chapter, it is getting interesting to see the types of different people they are starting to meet,cant wait to see what Jacob has to say when he gets back home.Keep the chapters coming Jonathan they are great..

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  10. weuu. u have some anonymous there that pretend to be a publisher.i think that you should consider the reader's comments. if they do not want the cullens or jacob's pack to be harmed then do not harm them. reader's power is amazing. they all reading this because they are attached to twilight. so please dont. you've done a great job so far. but if something's happening to the cullens or jacobs pack i dont think i can continue to read. i;m sorry to say this but please dont feel threatened by the mysterious publisher.

    just my opinion. anything its up to u. keep updating.
    cheers.

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  11. Hey - thanks again to EVERYONES COMMENTS :D
    Keep it up - Chapter 18 will be out this week (I'll keep you all updated).

    I consider everyones comments, but I think what the publisher is saying (and I do agree), is that I have to go with what I feel is best for the story at the "end-of-the-day" (so in some cases, it could be a case of where I do have to go against other peoples advice, if that is what is best - and Stephanie Meyer did this to an extent as well.....I was so mad at her when Bella kissed Jacob, I didn't read on for while so didn't no that it was actually all okay in the end - I was always more of a 'team Edward' until I read the Saga again and saw Meyer's reasons for J & B's close relationship >> which make it all that whole lot more deeper). She/He isn't saying kill the Cullens though lol - but just to be in control as an author :D

    J

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  12. i agreed. but it seems that the so-called-publisher is threatening you. i the reader also do feel threatened. by the way, go with your instinct. we all support you.

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  13. you can actually consider both the reader's and the anonymous author's advice.. but don't forget to consider your own judgement as an author... it's your imagination who got all these chapters possible... trust your instincts... your story...your imagination led you to this... you have talent... and an a great talent.. =)

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  14. could u do something to make jake fall for bella again. the love triangle rocks...........

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  15. Savanna (your #1 fan)December 27, 2010 at 11:56 AM

    Venevores are real you know that. They do drink venom but they change more not just their ails grow long and changes color

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